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Tuesday 29 October 2019

Night

Night  
The night was still. Not a breath of wind could be felt. An eerie silence
filled the warm evening air, broken only by the sound of the crow’s wings flapping
as it returned to its nest with food.
Combined with the ghostly silhouette of the tower and the rickety pathway that led to
it, the ominous silence made Lucy nervous. She felt a prickle on the back of her neck as
she thought about what she might find inside the tower, and what might be lurking in the
darkness around her.
Her heart began to thump inside her chest, seemingly matching the beat of the crow’s wings.
Lucy had always been slightly wary of crows; they had sooty, black wings, piercingly sharp
beaks and menacing, staring eyes. The crow had settled down in one of the gnarled
branches of a nearby tree. She thought it was watching her. Surely it wasn’t though?
Crows didn’t do that. It must have been her imagination.
Plucking up all of her courage, she approached the stairs. They looked rotten and
crumbling, as if nobody had set foot on them for years and years. The crow was still
staring at her, and had tilted its head to one side as if pointing its beak towards the tower.
“What was this crow up to?” she thought to herself.
“Are you trying to warn me about something?” she asked the crow.
The crow did not respond, only shuffling its feet slightly on the branch,
head still tilted to one side. She frowned. “Of course you’re not trying to
warn me about something, you’re just a stupid bird.”
Her eyes left the crow and she ascended the first few steps on the rickety path
towards the tower. “It’s just a silly bird.” Lucy muttered to herself under her breath.
“Don’t be such a wimp.”
The crow watched as she left, and smiled. A wicked, cruel smile accompanied by a
cackling laugh. “Silly, silly girl” it squawked. “I must tell the others she is coming.”
The crow took off into the night…


3 comments:

  1. Kia Ora James!
    My name is Julia and I am a year 8 student from Yaldhurst Model School.

    Ka pai on the blog post. That is a lot of writing! it must have taken some dedication! I love how your writing is really expressive.

    It is great that you added a nice title and your writing. It makes the blog cool.

    To improve, maybe you could add what you liked about this and put your writing in a slide to make it a little neater.

    Do you like writing? Why did you have to write this? Did you like writing this?

    Apart from that, you did an awesome job!

    Nga Mihi

    - Julia

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  2. Hey James, my name is Chloe I am a year 8 from Yaldhurst Model School.
    Wow done! this Blog post is amazing. I really like your piece of writing, its very descriptive and very well written!

    Maybe you could make your title a little better by putting a descriptive word before or after 'night'? To make it a little better even more you could put into slides and add drawings to it like a book?

    Do you like writing? Is there anything you would want to change to this wonderful piece of writing?

    Kind regards
    - Chloe

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  3. Hello James.WOW! I really enjoyed reading your story.Is this something that you made up yourself?.Maybe you could have added a little description to the top of your work to explain why you writing this story.
    Well done.I really enjoyed reading it.

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